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Title: Always There
Author: Qui-Gina Jinn
Characters: Qui-Gon, Obi-Wan
Summary: Duel of the Fates is about to end.
Disclaimer: I own nothing, am just playing around in the sandbox.
Author’s note: This is my second ever attempt at writing. It was actually written some time ago, but I haven’t had the courage to actually post it.
Tak til Lora for at beta-læse :D



I’m dying, Padawan.

I can hear you fight the Sith. Now I’m certain that’s what the Zabrak is.

The lightsaber that pierced me is flashing red through my half-closed eyes. He is good – too good, I fear.
I can feel your pain, disbelief and the anger that fills you. Dearest Padawan, don’t let the anger consume you!
Control it.
I can feel the ferociousness of you attacks and the immense hatred from the Sith. You are good, Padawan, but how long can you last?

I’m proud of you, of all that you have accomplished. I love you, my apprentice, my friend, my son. Do you know that?

I hear my lightsaber clattering to the floor as you drop down beside me. Oh, Padawan, I hear the desperation and disbelief in your voice as you try to deny what’s happening.

There’s so much I want to say to you, so much left to share and yet what I hear myself talking about, trying to convince you about, is Anakin.

I can hardly speak now. My breathing has become ragged and erratic. I want to say so much more to you, let you know what my heart feels, but my voice won’t obey me.

The bright light of the Force is beckoning to me, it craves me now. I can no longer resist it.
Fear not, my beloved apprentice – we will meet again…


~~~~
Years later:


Obi-Wan was sitting cross legged on the sandy floor in his small Tatooine cabin.
Anakin had been right he realised – it really did get everywhere.

He quickly banished the thought. The memories of Anakin were too painful.

Where had he failed? What was it he had said or failed to say? Could he have prevented his former Padawan’s fall to the dark side? He sighed deeply, closing his eyes against the pain of loss and despair soaring through him.
“Anakin, my brother, why?” he whispered.
“Why couldn’t I see? Why didn’t you tell me?”
He took a deep breath, as he felt a pricking in the eyes.

“It’s ok to cry, little one.”
Obi-Wan’s eyes flew open. He didn’t believe his ears, but they had not deceived him.

There, right in front of him, stood the spectral form of Qui-Gon Jinn.

He looked exactly as Obi-Wan remembered him, from the beard and long hair to the long brown robe and the eyes – those eyes in which Obi-Wan could always find comfort, trust, love and peace.
“Master! You- - I – how?” He was too surprised to form a sentence.

Qui-Gon chuckled quietly, a small smile playing on his lips…







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smukt. Kort, enkelt. Men smukt :)
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Ja, den er rigtig god. :-D Kom til at grine over Obi-Wans mangel på ord til sidst. :lol:

“Master! You- - I – how?”

Meget meningsfyldt... :wink:
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Hehe, nu var jeg jo den første der fik lov til at læse det første af det, på vej til Aalborg til syweekenden, men jeg har ikke læst det sidste afsnit. Så der var da noget nyt :wink:

Det er rigtig godt. Det er smukt, rørende og, som Mara sagde, enkelt. Det er rart med en FF der er enkelt, for en gangs skyld :-)

Når man læser om Qui-Gons tanker, mens han er ved at dø, er det lige til at få tårer i øjnene. Det er virkelig flot skrevet. Thumbs up :wink:

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:) Hvor er den go, hmm sagde jeg vist også da jeg fik lov til at læse starten i ålborg. Slutningen du har skrevet gør den bare bedre.
Kan især godt lide det sidste:

“It’s ok to cry, little one.”
Obi-Wan’s eyes flew open. He didn’t believe his ears, but they had not deceived him.

There, right in front of him, stood the spectral form of Qui-Gon Jinn.

He looked exactly as Obi-Wan remembered him, from the beard and long hair to the long brown robe and the eyes – those eyes in which Obi-Wan could always find comfort, trust, love and peace.
“Master! You- - I – how?” He was too surprised to form a sentence.

Qui-Gon chuckled quietly, a small smile playing on his lips…

Det er bare så obi / qui-gon agtigt  :-)
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Neeej...  :-D :-D

Det var godt, at jeg læste den her. Du er virkelig god til at beskrive forholdet mellem Qui-Gon og Obi-Wan og senere Obi-Wans tanker om Anakin... Hvor var den smuk og rørende. og du kan fatte dig i korthed, men stadig sige så meget...  :wink: :wink:


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hmmm ... jeg ved godt de er munke, men helt ærligt?

Ud over det er det super godt skrevet, men der er lige lidt lovligt Anne Rice over det der homoerotiske forhold.


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Tror ikke at Gina har haft til hensigt at det skulle være sådan.

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hm, homoerotisk? Hvordan når du dog frem til det? :)
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hm, homoerotisk? Hvordan når du dog frem til det? :)

Det ville jeg egentlig også gerne vide...  :?

Phan, eftersom jeg aldrig har læst noget af Anne Rice, har jeg lidt svært ved at se hvor du får dét fra.

Og nej, det har aldrig, nogensinde og på igen måde været hensigten.

Hvis du vælger at tolke det som noget sådan må det vel stå dig frit for, men please bear in mind at det ikke er skrevet som værende et[- hvad var det du kaldte det? - "homoerotisk forhold".

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hmmm ... jeg ved godt de er munke, men helt ærligt?
Huh? Mind explaining?

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